Saveet Waits

Welcome to Saveet Saturdays. My plan is to make sure I visit Saveet a few days each month, and share the freewriting on Saturdays. Maybe I’ll continue from a previous freewrite. Maybe I’ll jump into a new scene. It’ll be whatever part of Saveet’s story she wishes to share. Sure, she is She Who Failed, but the fire to do better in this life burns in her soul with a power no abuse, no fear, no creature, will silence.

Saveet’s more shy about visiting me, now that winter has given me only two days of shoveling, but she did comment how strange the white stuff was. She told me I made too much noise, huffing and puffing. And to be so silly as to take my jacket off, and hang it out in the open for anyone to swipe. When I hugged the trash bag to my chest, she thought about how she’d save the last roll of grass from the flood unleased by the upper dam when the logs gave way from two days of torrents, raining boulders down the mountain. Now I have a bit more of her story, but that’s not what I’ll share since I haven’t freewritten it.

Instead, here’s the continuation from the previous piece.

The thrum of the creature’s “lub” and “dub” pound through me, an ever-rising disturbance. Odd, though, that the ground itself does not carry this beat, yet the air carries no sound of wingbeats. I concentrate on making my eyes see only the swath of night ahead of me, with dawn reluctant to arrive now that the threat of the next storm looms—ice, sand, or sideways rain, they all sting the same. Except they sting me less, my scars toughening my hide so I’m more like the boar than my people. I claim them, even if they won’t claim me. Our goddess cut us free from the same womb, and would not abandon me despite my failure. The acolytes may have hidden the scrolls from me, but I’ve found them time over time. That smacks of Neeshnaet’s will. Our goddess blazed the way when her siblings abandoned her, huddled behind the boulders at the Storms of Time bore down on them. Her shout, the scythe carving Time around her and the sapling Nabigoroon. Had they stood with her, they would not now be lost. Now, that Nabigoroon tree shades half the village when the suns pound us before evening’s cooling winds arrive.

When my eyes finally focus on the stretch before me, to the exclusion of all else, I work to quiet my thoughts that my eyes may focus. Still, this puzzle nibbles at me. Perhaps I’ve read something, one of the times I’ve huddled with the scrolls by the river before returning them to the changing hidey-holes the acolytes use.

Please, thoughts? Think no more of past, future. Instead, trust the goddess to choose the sense I need to find this creature before it attacks.

In the silence of the night, the “lub” and “dub” speed up, with a consistency of the rhythm between the two. The night’s darkness shifts, half a league out, near the Nabigoroon tree. The darkness moves up and down, in and out, such a near match to the night I’d have missed it if I’d split my attention to the land all around.

A quarter league out, the mismatch of night takes shape, cloaked so well in illusion. And this creature rises huge. By the time it reaches me, it will be three times my height, wide as five bulls pulling the plow, and that’ s not counting on either side, I can’t be sure, but wings? They don’t flap, so the creature doesn’t fly, yet its feet make no sound if they contact the ground. They’re nubby compared to the creature, maybe one bull wide each, but that makes it seven bulls wide. No creature in our realm reaches that size, not without magic. And magic brings evil the goddess never intended us to survive.

I reach for the alarm bell. Their eyes won’t see anything, but I must warn them.

“Wait.” The voice slips into me, without my permission. Not said as a command, but more a plea. I used that tone, before I understood that made the whip land harder across my shoulders.

I know of no creature that speaks our tongue. I am She Who Failed, and I will fail again if I don’t ring the bell, goddess knows. Or does she know something different? If this creature knows our tongue, might it not be sent by the goddess in our need? The acolytes think they’ve hidden the apocalypse, but I’ve read even those scrolls. And I understand. But this? I do not.

I leave my cover and walk towards the creature. My heart gives a “lub.” A “dub.” My beat, sounding in my chest, tiny. But it feels the same as the noise I could not place. Its lifebeat. Oh, goddess, what path have you set me upon?

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Book Review: Breath of Fire

The Details

Cat in boarskin battle gear, on the Ice Plains

Cover of book, by Sourcebooks Casablanca

Breath of Fire, Amanda Bouchet (Sourcebooks Casablanca, January, 2017)

Book two of the Kingmaker Chronicles, 432 pp. At the time of this review, 2/7/2017, it holds a 4.5-star review on Amazon.

Genre: Romance, High Fantasy

Book Obtained by: Purchased from Amazon.com

My Chocolate Rating: 5 Godiva Chocolates (sinfully good)

 

From the Jacket:

“I am Catalia Fisa, and I do not break.

“Deep breath in. Long breath out. The Gods are telling me I’m some sort of new Origin, which apparently means it’s my job to give Thalyria a fresh start. Griffin crowned me with the symbols of the three realms.

“If I’m supposed to be not just a queen but The Queen, I’d better start acting like it.

Review

Breath of Fire continues Amanda Bouchet’s tale launching from Greek mythology, an earth-like world where they still hold sway, and populated with beasts from Greek mythology plus ones that I’ve never heard of and assume to be Bouchet’s creations, like the Ipotane who seem to be centaurs with horse ears, but centaurs also exist. The Ipotane call the brutal Ice Plains home.

The book begins hot on the heels of the conclusion of book one—the next day. It begins lazily enough, Cat in bed thinking through a synopsis of book one, and no Griffin. When Griffin arrives, the conflict begins. I question everything I thought I knew, and part of me is ready to be angry with Bouchet if she makes this a dream, and on the edge of my seat as I suspect it won’t be a dream. Yep, I’m hooked, desperate to see how Bouchet will get Cat and Griffin out of this conflict.

The pace slows nicely for some family time, then thunders into action once the characters decide their next steps. Cat spends plenty of time in that first-person self-doubt about her fate, her upbringing, her own choices. As a female reader, I enjoy characters with a complex head-space, intent on making the world a better place. Cat may be destined to be the harbinger, but that doesn’t mean she’ll toe the line the Fates have set, or the one the gods push her towards.

Artemis aiming her bow

Clay catch-all, purchased from the annual Greek Festival held in Columbus, Ohio

Tension lets up now and again, only for Bouchet to ratchet it up with a new danger or challenge. Stakes increase through the book. When Cat and Delta Team get themselves out of danger, I applaud it. When one of the gods step in to help them out of it, my emotions tangle. This is, after all, an author steeped in Greek mythology, writing her own Greek mythology. And I well remember from the Greek tales I love, the gods are famous for meddling with humans. Thus, it’s a convention I grudgingly accept if it fits the plot. At the same time, it’s an easy out for the author and the characters on at least one occasion.

For the most part, the complications grew organically from the plot. The exception occurred around page 230 of the US printing. That felt like Bouchet needed Cat to have a turning point, and the event is engineered to bring that turn. It’s a small disappointment in context of the whole book. I’d have read it faster, but participation in a writing contest meant I didn’t have much reading time until I turned in my piece.

Just as in the first book, I enjoyed how Bouchet worked in Cat’s backstory as needed, often in context of a conflict, with Cat’s emotions leaning one way, and her history pushing her the other. I don’t know which path she’ll take, which makes the conflict all the more tense for me. Each time her mother, Andromeda, made a psychic appearance, I couldn’t know what price Cat or the team would pay.

The sex scenes seemed to burn hotter and longer than the first book. As a more conservative reader, I tend to skate past them, except Bouchet does weave in the emotional connections, and she sometimes weaves in character development. At the very least, I won’t read her books at work, or standing in line in a store.

Artemis holding bow with falcon

Clay urn, another year’s purchase at the annual Greek Festival in Columbus, Ohio

By the time Buchet brings the book to the final two big events of the book, something like sixty pages, the tension ratcheted, ratcheted, ratcheted up. I had expected to find a breathing room point to put the book down and head to bed, but found myself forced to read until the last page. You’ve been forewarned!

I’ll give the same warning I did in the first book: If you are sensitive to rape culture, this may not be the book for you. Bouchet will once more put Cat in the role of a victim—both early in the book, and in the last act. For a woman of immense power, she’s at the mercy of males—and it’s at these spots that I warred with myself—rape culture/woman as victim/not tapping the power she has until…. Be forewarned. I’m still trying to learn to call out places when I see it, so it’s possible more sensitive readers will find it in other places.

Just as in the first book, I once more have to “accept” some seeming slips of phrases, like the concept of minutes in an ancient society, once more tachycardia, once more nerves. Again, maybe they’re not anachronisms, but they jump out at me. It’s a handful of times at most.

If you read book one and enjoyed Cat’s personality, her call-it-like-she-sees-it leadership style, and her tendency to leap in to help first, worry about herself later, her introspection, curly up in your recliner, throw on a blanket, and settle in for hours of reading enjoyment. Bouchet weaves this book out of the same cloth as book one.

Yep, I loved this book. Too bad I’ll have to wait until January 2018 for the final installment of this trilogy.

 

More about the Author

Learn more about the next volume of Cat and Griffin’s story, Heart on Fire, at the author’s webpage or the book page; or buy the book, as it contains a chapter of Heart on Fire. Find other reviews of Breath of Fire at Amazon or your favorite book-review site. Find the author also on Facebook and Twitter.

Bouchet is now a USA Today Bestselling author for this book. Here are the other awards it’s won, and it’s still in the first month and change of printing:

  • A USA Today Bestseller
  • An Amazon Best Book of the Month
  • Publishers Weekly, Starred Review
  • Kirkus, Starred Review
  • Booklist, Starred Review
  • RT Book Reviews, Top Pick

Keep Reading

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Grannies with Guns: NYCM SSC

(Where a Writer’s Ideas Tangle in Puns)

This is my third year participating in the New York City Midnight Short Story Challenge, where writers are packaged into heats with prompts unique to each, and have 8 days to write a story no longer than 2,500 words. To make it to Round 2, judges must score us in the top 5 or 6 out of our heat of 30 (or 31 if you’re lucky, like my heat 98).

Round 2, participants have 3 days to write no more than 2,000 words; and the coveted Round 3, 1 day to write a story under 1,500 words. I’d love to make it to round 2 again; I’m not so sure I want to make it to round 3 again. Once more, it’s the day before the Flying Pig. I haven’t told my sis yet, but maybe, just maybe, because I’m a glutton for punishment and testing my limits, I might, gulp, say I’m ready to try running/walking the half marathon. If I sign up for it, can I guarantee I make Round 2 and Round 3 like last year’s adventure?

Our competition has hit its highest number, 3031 competitors. Heat 98 drew prompts of Political Satire/Guns/Middleman. In past years, combinations have always seemed off-the-wall to me, and I’ve seen dozens of combinations because I’ve helped beta-read friends’ pieces (meaning I’m their sounding board) and I’ve critiqued other competitors in the forum the competition sets for us. Why wouldn’t creative juices flow when you write a Fairy Tale about a Whale and a Tropical Rain Forest?

But this year’s prompts? C’mon, they hold hands, screaming “terrorists,” or “arms dealer” or “gun control.” Where’s the creativity in that? I’ve entered this contest to see if it’s like the first two years: I come up with a great idea that leads to a novel (Solve for x comes from my 2015 contest) or the off-the-wall romance short story I’m shopping around (“Stolen Heart, Stolen Will, and the Wisdom to Know the Difference” comes from 2016’s Round 2).

american flag, gun, and bullets

Photo from public domain

Two Saturdays ago, I surveyed my prompts and gulped. Publicly, I’d said the only genre I didn’t want was Horror. But like an overdue notice, Political Satire sat in my back pocket, the number two genre I didn’t want. Nailed it!

Online writer friends taught me, ditch the first three ideas. Odds are, other competitors will grab that same idea. I sat in Panera’s, my go-to writing spot, mulling over the first idea of a terrorist-driven story; of a gun-control driven story. I tried to purge from my brain the backdrop of the 2016 Political Reality TV. A series I couldn’t ignore. Elections where idiot politicians from both parties rallied supporters with disgraceful rhetoric, pitting “us” against “them.” For shame, political parties, for shame. For shame, candidates, for shame.

The Seeds

Therein lay a seed, a government doing something so stupid, someone was going to have to stand up to them. But who? And what stupidity could I seize upon? I continued my research, expanding outside literature. I had no idea that during the Depression, several Broadway musicals turned to political satire.

Two hours in, and I still hadn’t had the inkling of a third idea I could discard. Telling myself I’d earned my fru-fru coffee, I popped in another Celtic Christmas CD and berated myself for not having updated my travel bag. I didn’t know it, but seed two germinated.

picture of an older woman, gray hair and glasses perched on her nose

This might be Granny Glenda: To old to teach chemistry, my aunt Fanny’s fanny!

Crossing from my back corner into the main dining area, muses drew me in with laughter and stories. A table full of delightful grandmothers, mischief sparkled in their eyes. With Broadway on my mind, “Granny Get Your Gun” gave me a title. Seed three. I could not discard this. I could not. But….

I turned to my online friends. Competitors should turn a cold shoulder to each other, but that’s never what we do. They embraced my story concept and reminded, “keep your focus on the absurdity of political satire.”

Powered by their comments and ideas, the coffee, and a massive pecan roll, I hammered out the rough draft. My grannies with gumption, sick of a government determined to legislate to protect us from our own stupidity, wouldn’t go quietly into the night of over-protectionism, no siree, Bob, and mind you don’t burn your hand on that treat fresh from the oven. The grannies engineered a plastic gun not even an idiot could confuse with a real weapon. They baked the plastic in mini bundt pans, frosted them with silicone to glisten like confections, and shot sugar bullets a whopping inch. Yeah, hard to hurt anyone like that. The more absurd, the more I worked it in. Puns, innuendo, Granny Reality TV, FitBitMeters on Steroids, I popped that addictive material in everywhere it fit.

Beta Readers Rise to the Challenge

Gun Cake

Photo from Baked Goods by Cori

Thanks to wonderful betas, the story deepened as it passed from draft one to the final draft, nine. The humor deepened; the grannies got more manipulative and devious; the government got dafter and dafter. I laughed, my betas laughed. They told me where my humor fell short, or where I could start a gag and deepen it as the piece went on. Clueless Granny Gayle came to life, popping in with facts and figures, and raising her hand when Granny Gertrude asked who had time to read 600 pages of legislation.

Check out the writing of my awesome betas:

  • Shanan Winters—from her webpage, her novel Rising (Book 1 of the Adept Cycle): “What do you get when you combine a no-nonsense federal agent, a high-profile murder and a demon turf war? Special Agent Kessa St. James is about to find out.” Her professional services as writer, editor, and blogger are also available.
  • Hylan Baines—Hylan’s working on her debut romance novella, Finding Home. She’s also got a webpage.
  • Paul Draper—Looks like horror’s Paul’s thing!
  • Corrie Haldane
  • Cathy Missinne—no blog yet

I won’t learn my fate until March 20th, with round two being the end of that week. I’m hanging my hopes on a gang of grannies, and hours of writing I refuse to tally up. And I wouldn’t trade that effort. It’s what we writers do, pouring our energy into a story, and breathing characters to life … with the help of our writer friends.

What’s something you worked hard to accomplish? Did friends jump to you aid? I’d love to hear your story.

 

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